Update on "The Final Cruise" by F. Ellsworth Lockwood

Would you like to help me write a book, or help me make the book better? Here's your  opportunity to play critic/English teacher and model reader!

The posts below are old (embarrasing?) versions.

The full story has now been revised several times however, and is available for public viewing at:

 http://www.authonomy.com/books/21239/the-final-cruise/.

Feel free to just read my book on Authonomy.com ... and other people's books as well. Or if you would be so kind, you may help me rise in the "ranks" on Authonomy.com by registering and backing my book (by putting it on your "bookshelf").

To search for the book on Authonomy go  to link as noted above http://www.authonomy.com/books/21239/the-final-cruise/). 

The "author's name" on the Authonomy website is "eltopiaauthor" an the title is "The Final Cruise."

On Authonomy, you may notice that I was experimenting with an added character to introduce the rest of the book, but that proved difficult to do without it appearing "tacked on." Now I am considering just chopping off the first chapter of the story as it reads on Authonomy, but have not  gone to that drastic step as of this posting.

If anyone is interested to read both versions, I would love to hear your thoughts as to which opening works better. Thanks.


Please Help Me: If you would like to increase my ranking at the www.authonomy.com site, please register there, and back my book, The Final Cruise by "EltopiaAuthor" or just search the site for "eltopia." Again, thank you ahead of time.

Also, any comments would be appreciated, whether at this site or on the Authonomy site.


If you know any publishers or agents, please tell them about my story. Thanks